Being a musician first and a writer second is a great thing to be. I am one. I never wanted to be the drum major in high school. I really enjoyed marching and playing trumpet. Mostly, because I got to solo a lot.
Nice piece on the trials of the drum major thing. I am in conducting now(I'm a music ed major) and that independent hand thing is tough.
Kyle
I'm a sucker for a good love poem. I like them even better when they're about first love and I LOVE it when there's a possibility of being that love being really meant to be!!!
It's obvious why I liked this one huh? hehe The poem had a wonderful flow and it was easy to be lost in the words instead of rhythm. Nice work!
Kyle
This is a neat look at "Bowling for Columbine". It's interesting to try to get inside the Moore's head like this. I think you did a wonderful job with that. It took me awhile to figure out what point view this was from.
I have one little spelling correction for you. It's "bassoon" not "basson". Nothing major, I'm just a music ed major.
I'm not sure I agree with your take on this piece however. First of all, Frank Tichelli is a wonderful composer. I think his motives here are misconstrued by this piece. This piece is dark, yet out of darkness comes light. The brass in this piece is scored beautifully and is trumpeting the arrival new hope out of tragedy.
Two band members died, yet a whole band lives on and can use this piece to overcome the loss of their fallen. Frank wasn't using this as a get rich quick scheme. The situation at Columbine touched him as it did many.
Do you think the "She Said Yes" the story of Cassie Bernall is also a publication for the sole purpose of getting more money?
Kyle
This is a powerful section of dialogue. I write things like this a lot, sometimes to help me realize how to forgive the little things. This is great so far.
I see that it's a work in progress and that's good. It's nice to get feedback as you're working through a story. Nice job and thanks for letting us see this in the first stages!
Kyle
Great work. I really wish the spacing was a little more prominent so it would be easier to read, but I love this story. I'm using it in my Drama NL this month. I hope others enjoy it as well.
Kyle
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I have one little spelling correction for you. It's "bassoon" not "basson". Nothing major, I'm just a music ed major.