thanks for sharing. I myself have borderline personality and I can relate to this poem. I know relationships can be hard. I like the easy flow and the imagery although the rhyme scheme in some places seems a bit forced. Great job overall though.
thanks again~Kris
Hi..I saw you on I.N.K.E.D and thought I'd visit your portfolio :)
This is a nice short and to the point poem. It could be OUTSTANDING with just a touch of work. most authors would probably harp on the idea of more punctuation. I am not going to get into that.. because personally I suck at that lol.
Content: Very clear message! what I get is that a love is lost but somehow there is just an apathetic feeling left over? (poetry can be interpreted in so many different ways...that's the beauty of it. so don't be offended if I am off base.) The imagery is lovely.
the 1 comment I do have is a common mistake and so easy to make. "past and present tense" in the first lines you are using present tense. and in the final line you use past tense "dreamed"
WOW!!! This is deep. It must have come from the heart. I love your imagery that you used throughout the poem..on such a difficult topic..probably painful to write yet you kept it together and consistent ...good flow good rhyme. No complaints. oh the final stanza is the icing on the cake.. "ready to love" I like that a lot!! thanks for sharing. ~Kris
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