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Review of A dozen Roses  Open in new Window.
Review by Harry Graff Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)
I like the flow a great deal. Obviously the mental picture of wounds suffered and also inflicted springs to mind. The poem really settles on something everyone struggles with: How to overcome grief or any other powerful, almost crippling emotion. Anyone able to draw that out of themselves so vividly should keep digging deep and sharing these sparks of insight.
As an obvious tip, the "poor" might have been meant to be "pour" but if not, it does lend itself to provoking thoughts of self worth.
Or I could be reading too much into things
Kudos and keep writing.
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Review by Harry Graff Author IconMail Icon
Rated: ASR | (3.5)
I love the idea firstly. The age old scenario of a young person seeking guidance from her elders, knowing her grandfather will give her the steadfast truth. It conjures up a nice imagery of a warm living room and large round eyes gazing up into an older weathered face, waiting for the unraveling of all of life's mysteries.
I do think the structure itself is a bit jumbled, perhaps. Maybe free-forming the paragraphs so they aren't broken up so awkwardly...remember, flow is everything. Spelling and punctuation are fine and It really gave me a chuckle at the end. How could he not know there are more questions to answer, more things to be discovered?
Kudos and keep writing!
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