This was certainly an original take on the more traditional dragon and sacrifice tale. The villagers certainly didn't inspire sympathy, and it almost brought a cheer from me when Lazy Eye met his end. The dragon seemed quite clever, especially for bringing remains from the graveyard to keep up the pretense.
Nice writing!
Another short poem that really says a lot. Love can be very painful, especially when there's a lot of deception on the part of one. 'Trust takes time' is my favorite line... and so very true when trust has previously led to heartbreak.
A well written piece.
Wow! So much raw emotion in this poem. The short lines only increased the sense of isolation or desperation. 'My mind a prison, my heart a cage' are definitely my two favorite lines, perhaps because they are kind of relatable, but also because they show how the effects of some things can be long-lasting or permanent.
Excellent work.
What a great poem. The rhyming was done perfectly and the steady rhythm definitely reminded me of the sea and the ebbing and flowing of the tides. I liked the way you compared life to sailing, with the storms at sea being similar to the problems life likes to throw up at us all at times.
Wow, what a time you had. I've never been to funeral, although I have known plenty of people that have died. The timing was terrible too, being just before your birthday. And well done for taking yourself out of your comfort zone.
I liked the way you presented this, and the use of emojis was a great touch.
Great use of the words 'I am', and each and every one sounds so positive; not one negative one amongst. I loved the way you kept the reason for the positivity right until the very end. A poem that cannot help but bring a smile to the reader.
Well done!
What a great celebratory poem you've written here. Short and too the point, summing up the first day of a week long celebration. Apart from the actual content you made the poem visually pleasing as well and good job with getting that rhyme in there.
Very nice work.
This really is an excellent piece of poetry. Quite short in length but the words you use say so much. It was quite unusual to have the reflection in the mirror as the 'voice' of the piece but it worked extremely well. The penultimate line has to be my favorite.
Thank you for introducing a new form of poetry. It does sound quite challenging.
We don't have Thanksgiving over here, but your poem brought the occasion to life, especially illustrating the importance of food and of family to the occasion.
A very enjoyable read.
I love this, especially the first stanza where all is confusion and everything seems to be clamoring for attention. The middle verse captures the moment when a single idea seems to take hold, pushing the rest of the chaos to the back and allowing ideas to flourish.
Very nice use of the prompt words.
A well written piece of poetry that is nicely presented as well. You do a great job of describing the Ferris wheel, especially when it grinds to a halt. It always amazes me how children are drawn to them. Nice capture of the more wary and ever patient parent too.
Wow, what an emotional read this turned out to be. What I was really impressed by was the way that you showed how cancer effected the life of the entire family, not only the mother. It was nice for the husband to have such a long-standing friendship to give him at least a chance of recovery.
This was quite an unusual poem to read. I've got to admit that I like the idea of picking a letter to focus on at the start of each couplet. Have you used other letters? Anyway, this is quite an uplifting read, very inspirational in content. The fourth couplet is my favorite.
Well done.
What impressed me most about this was the way you showed the mother's guilt. As a long-term, full time carer I know how those feelings manage to creep in. Sounds, and their vibrations, can be comforting or agonizing to those on the Autism Spectrum, as well as those with other kinds of challenges.
I enjoyed the read.
A fantastic talent to have, and so well described. I'm with you on the empathy thing, although so often I wish I wasn't as it leads to such internal conflict when I can relate to both points of view. It's kind of sad that no one will carry this on.
Very impressive.
I've got to admit that I didn't find Clark in the slightest bit 'likeable' - he was so conceited, seeing himself as taking charge and quite happy to provide a sacrifice to do so. There was something about the dampness and the drips that really added to the horror atmosphere.
This was a lovely little tale of opposites. I loved the way you showed that emotions made the sun become hotter and hotter until it eventually warmed everything in its range, including the cold moon. This made me think of all the different shades of color that the moon can take on.
This is a poem that captures the early signs of spring so well. We don't have crocus here but we do have daffodils that grow in the garden, and apart from the color this could just as easily have been describing them. Like you say, these little buds are so easy to miss, but definitely make for a feel-good moment when they are noticed.
This is really beautiful, and I think that is my favorite time of day too. Apart from the bats. We have a few that swoop down really low, and actually had one that flew indoors once. The rhyming is nicely done and there is a gentle rhythm that runs the whole way through.
Ha! Well this was certainly an unusual find. Not just a poem about a zombie but a chain of haiku. I don't understand why the undead don't feature in a lot more things. The first of the four was almost beautiful, but you soon inserted plenty of gory details.
You asked for a low rating so...
Love the toing and froing of this piece. Clearly both husband and wife have got their differences but they are both quite passionate too. Lots and lots of feelings from both sides - and I've got to admit there were parts that really rang true. Well done.
I was very impressed by your presentation of this piece, making each point stand out. I also liked the way you did not only concentrate on the hard facts - the initial panic and dread were very hard to live with. A good cautionary message about not believing everything that you hear or read.
Well done.
I found this to be quite an emotional piece to read, as I was confronted with mental health issues as a child too. The way you described the adults talking, those 'who speak too nicely' was spot on, but the most powerful part was the shattering plate and the rush to clear it away afterwards.
Very impressive work.
Haha! This was an enjoyable read for anyone who loves pets and appreciates the mischief that they can get up to. From Pip's habit of collecting shoes, I'm guessing that he is a dog, and the fluffy thing he loved to chase was a newcomer to the house - a cat or a kitten.
Anyway, very enjoyable and well-written.
Wow! This is such excellent poetry writing! Each line says enough to really pack up a punch, especially when you mention that it is a result of child abuse. Definitely one excellent example of where less is more.
Is that the requirements of the form? This is one I'd like to try.
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