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Review of MIST OF THE NIGHT  Open in new Window.
Review by Raspberry Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (1.0)
I have to say this is very short.. Is this in the idea phrase or something. You have an idea here which can be turned into something great with time and editing, however if this is your story it is rather short even for a short story...

And you might wanna review the structure here and you need to add punctuation..

If you work on it I am sure you will come up with something better ^^

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Review of Check and Mate  Open in new Window.
Review by Raspberry Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)
First of all, good job.

I like how these two people seem to dislike each other at the start but they find out they have something in common like the nerdishness of a game of chess.

I like how they are challenging each other without loosing any of their pieces. And it gets so intense they actually like each other.

I have nothing negative to say about this. I think it is brilliant!

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Review by Raspberry Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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