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Rated: E | (1.5)
This poem is bland. It seems to be a crappy 10 year old's religion class sum up god's message in a poem homework assignment. The rhyme scheme is forced, the "..." at the end of a few lines does nothing beneficial, and the words "blithe" and "unscrupulous" seem ridiculous. If you believe in god and want to pay some honor to him, write honestly about his world with language that isn't forced and sappy.
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