Tony Hwilka's (heytony) Reviews

Tony Hwilka

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159 Total Reviews Given

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#2778944

Review of My Love Stay

Review by Tony Hwilka

Rated: E

| (3.0)

Good work, but in my opinion for a short poem you have implanted too many I's and too many imagines. Makes the reader dizzy. Your poem has many possibilities to capture love. Go for it.

Tony

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#1833048

Review of The Christmas Gift

Review by Tony Hwilka

Rated: 13+

| (4.0)

I enjoyed reading your poem, Nice work. Keep writing. tony

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#1796851

Review of Ocean

Review by Tony Hwilka

Rated: E

| (3.5)

Very nice poem. You do have a mistake in the last line of the fourth stanza. You have to tell my you're alone-- should be to tell me you're alone. Tony

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#1755376

Review of Torn

Review by Tony Hwilka

Rated: E

| (1.0)

I think you have a good idea here but I also think you should spend more time with this poem because the grammar is not proper and it does not bring to the reader what I think your trying to say. Tony

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#1737804

Review of You

Review by Tony Hwilka

Rated: 13+

| (3.0)

You have written a pretty good poem here. In my opinion the first two lines are a little confusing.
How dare you--I dare you--same with the second line how change to I. What type of abuse? The second stanza needs work. Keep writing and good luck Tony

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#1733029

Review of Black Angels

Review by Tony Hwilka

Rated: 13+

| (3.5)

Not bad, But you have to polish it up a bit. For an example. How can tears turn to ice on one line and statues melt behind your eyes on the next line? Tony

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#1726571

Review of My Secret Tranquility

Review by Tony Hwilka

Rated: 13+

| (2.0)

You have good ideas but you have to make those ideas into a poem. It could be a prose. Leave it the way it is for now, then in a few months come back to it, Tony

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#1718818

Review of The Secret

Review by Tony Hwilka

Rated: 18+

| (4.5)

Great poem----very well written, I would say you spent a great deal of time on this poem. There are two places in the poem that hit a sour note at least for me. Bade and bled just doesn't work, Tony

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#1718803

Review of Wind

Review by Tony Hwilka

Rated: E

| (3.0)

Your poem has possiblies, The first stanza foretell- ye and me yuk, where did you come up with that?If you do something with that stanza and form the rest of the poem's lines I believe you will have a greater poem. Just my humble opinion. Tony

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#1619177

Review of Affair in My Office & Other Comic Poetry

Review by Tony Hwilka

Rated: ASR

| (4.0)

I like the way you compared your computer with a love affair. Good luck. Tony

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#1619129

Review of Warned

Review by Tony Hwilka

Rated: E

| (4.0)

The poem is ok but you could put more imagery. Also who was warned? Tony

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#1485816

Review of Beauty Is

Review by Tony Hwilka

Rated: E

| (3.5)

Hi Darla, I gave you a 3.5 rating because even though the poem could use more work on your part it is not saying anything new that hasn't been said before a thousand times. Spend more time on it and you will find that you can make it a great poem. Tony ** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only **