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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
I find this to be a very passionate poem. Such feeling in it. There is much I wonder about this man. What drives him to such pain?

I especially love the last line ,"Never be surprised, he has left you all these clues.". I love poems that end like that.

The only thing I could suggest to you would be to rework the line, "only capably of hurting himself". Perhaps, "he can only harm himself." Or "he is only capable of harming himself"? Or lastly "himself only can he harm"? Just some thoughts of course.

Please write on, your passion is contagious!
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