I clearly understand the message of the story, but that ending sentence just didn't seem to flow. Anger towards others and wanting to end it work well together, but that last sentence, I think, needs a little work.
I haft to say this story is quite well. Although I must ask, although is it a cat, do you mean it to be a lion of some sort? Also to have thought that a cat could teach a lesson like that is very uncommon. Keep up the good work, it's a good thing to teach lessons.
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