Cute story. The run on sentences are a little disconcerting, but I liked the story.
I think you could have developed her persona a bit more. I found myself wondering why I should care about her. A little more detail about her past would have helped. Besides, the imp was doing a good job of pulling out her flaws. Just think he could have done a bit more.
I'm really happy that I stumbled across this campfire because I am always looking for new quotes to include on my blog. So far I've amassed 250 that I think are suitable for writers. I'll surely check back here often so that I can scrape the best of the best for my own blog. Again, thanks for keeping things going.
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