The title grabbed me right away because I love reading/writing about forbidden love and overcoming it in some shape of form. Your poem had an interesting take on overcoming it--and I like that. It’s very different and, personally, I thought your poem was amazing.
It’s very…strong that the guy “shook his head, a signal that their love was dead” and then have her start crying. You think that it’s going to finish off about how her life is over--BUT THEN she gets angry and sends his soul wherever it went. Very, very strong of you as an author.
It sounds like you’ve got a true talent, so keep writing and God bless!
With eternal love and blessings,
HannaTheWriter
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