Love, lost for you, absolutely killed me. I enjoyed reading and enjoyed your writing style. I hope that you continue the story as it would be a great story to turn into a novel. You really did a very good job BEAR! :) Your story is very romantic and reminds me a tiny bit of a movie I once saw, P.S. I love you.
You have written a very nice poem rl. I like the best how it is well up to interpretation. The reader has no idea whether Toressa has passed on or if she is the narrator's former flame. Depending on how one takes reading it, both interpretations can leave the reader feeling so different. I like your description of the whispering leaves and touches.
I love how well you have crafted Melondthera. She is such an interesting character and she seems to have an unwavering confidence. I hope she and the captain have more time to be closer with eachother! They would definitely be a very cute couple. Nice world-building, as well.
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