This is really good. It made me laugh. The sad part is I could see Naruto actually doing this to Sasuke. Thank you for the funny story, and keep writing my friend.
A very nice read. You captured Trixie's personality quite nicely. The ending cliff hanger makes me want to read more. A few spelling errors to point out, near the beginning you had two words that weren't suppose to be capitalized. Other than that I didn't catch any obvious ones. Over all, great read!
A great story. You had a few typos and grammatical errors that could use fixing, but other than that it was a great story. You hit Fluttershy's personality spot on. Great read and good character composition. Keep writing my friend, I can't wait to read more.
Great read! I love this pairing, and I think you did a wonderful job at putting them together and having him propse at the train station at sunset. It was amazing and had a great feeling put into the writing. Again, great read. And good luck writing my friend.
Another good read in the series. Not as good as the others, but still good enough to keep me focused on the story. Over all, great works, a few spelling errors, but other than that a great read. I can't wait for the next one to be written! Keep at it my friend.
Another great read! It flows nicely and keeps you on your toes wondering what is going to happen next. Love the paring of Naruto and Hinata. A little side note, you put "too" where you should have used "to". But other than that I didn't catch any spelling errors. Another great read, and I look forward to the next one.
A amazing read. I have watched Naruto, but I believe that this would have made a more interesting story line for him. I am impressed and can't wait to read the next part. This is by far my most favorite couple and I think you did am amazing job paring them in this story. A couple of typos, but other than that, a great read. Easy to follow and intriguing.
This is a very good read. It is captivating and something I can relate to with the bullying. I noticed that your grammar, punctuation, and spelling could use a little polishing, but other than that it was really good.
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