I adore the concept that you have chosen to discuss the pain of life. You could end up having one of the best inspirational books to exist. So far it seems to be a true "digging" of yours to discover peace and happiness.
This endeavor channeled into positive reactions and reaches far beyond one's self is evident of someone with tremendous spiritual growth and so gratifying to read and experience.
The content is marvelous since I really like reading what I will call "period" pieces. The first part of this story felt insulting because of your interjection to the reader, but it was quite clear after reading this was necessary.
What I loved most was the descriptive nature of this story. Is it a biographic novel? It all seems to begin and end with this - we need more.
What was read was beautiful and had a certain flow. The beginning was long and might be better if more paragraphs were used.
Really good story because of the descriptive nature. Keep on writing with this in mind - describe, describe, describe because it places us there and involved in your story.
I did not review with bird's eye view of grammar and punctuation but with the idea of would I read this book when completed? Thank you.
What a great way to begin - respect for poetry and then to share what has to be heartfelt inner feelings.
For me, the poem was like a small story, the story of many women brought alive by your very expressive display of words.
The last two lines say it all
"though she was imprisoned, dreams found the locked door
and, finally pushed their way through" - I would add punctuation at the end - make the statement final as one feels when reading - the object finally found the way
Very nice. This could well be expanded with characters into a short story, novel form. Lots of romance and exotic, etc. One could almost see the cover for the novel - a great horse raring up with lots of flowing material from the gown of Lady Adara.
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