To have so few words to work with, you have created a fast-paced story, easy read. You might watch the flow. You used the descriptive word, WITCH, many times. By the second or third paragraph, we well knew she was a witch. I suggest using other descriptors, such as, old hag or crone. It's cute and creative story telling. Thank you for entertaining me. Keep up the good works.
Your story was great! Very scary and vivid! I felt as if I was sitting next to you transfixed and unable to move. You took me on a wild ride into your nightmare. I was enthralled feeling the THUMP! THUMP! thumping of your heart and wondering where it would end. What a scary ride you took me on. Thank you for your skillful storytelling. WRITE ON!
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