I always wanted my lover to be my best friend. So far, this has eluded me. I really liked the flow. I laughed at (she could seriously imagine the coroner bringing her dead body to the house and her dad yelling at them because they brought it after curfew). That was funny. I love sarcasm where some people don't. I think that sarcasm is much better in writing than spoken. Some people just don't get it. They are very literal {like Bones on Bones). I especially like how you brought the relationship to life. I could feel the characters. I think that is 3/4 of the battle. Good job.
Printed from https://writing.com/main/profile/reviews/gracieracie
All Writing.Com images are copyrighted and may not be copied / modified in any way. All other brand names & trademarks are owned by their respective companies.
Generated in 0.10 seconds at 7:28pm on Nov 23, 2024 via server WEBX2.