Overall a great piece, accomplishing what it set out to do very well. I liked how it both began and ended with the idea of nothingness while filling the middle with all the vast "somethingness" that is space. To strengthen the piece I would suggest adding even greater detail in the middle section, emphasizing the sights and sensations as the self moves towards an eventual nothingness. If I understand the purpose of your work then I think this would strengthen the entire thing as a whole.
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