This is a ghost story. But at no point was I ever really truly scared. The house and characters were well described. But it lacked the appropriate atmosphere for a ghost story.i also noticed some spelling mistakes aloud should be allowed breathe should be breath
I like this story though the the amount of violence puts it slightly above the 13+ rating puts it slightly outside the range of I write in December January February. it was also a tad perditable when I saw haw vain esmerelda was I knew that the Kings childeren were the key to the riddle
I like your description of Mildred, but you don't describe moly, you explain how Molly came to be there but why would their mother sacrifice her younger daughter by sending her through one way gate way. Where she should not be able to survive, their mother is not even given a name.
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