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Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
Has the potential to make a great monster story. I felt the need for an explanation as to how Joey was bitten by a bat but not eaten by Santa. In fact, why does Santa have the bats at all? I guess that doesn't need a full reveal, but I feel if the vampire angle was dropped and it just focused on a horrid Santa having eaten both brothers like a really off Grimm's tale, that would be really cool. Keep up the good work!
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