Good story, very fun to read. Even though the child getting back at abusive parents is an old tale, you give it new life with a fun (for lack of a better word) twist. And that's all we can hope for.
I'm torn about the title though. In a way, I like how it kind of leads you to a conclusion, but having read your story, I think the final line would be a great title for it as well - Perfect Match.
On a different note - I'm not sure you need the interaction with the classmate. It doesn't serve much of a purpose, besides the mention of the apples; which could be included elsewhere.
Keep on writing and I'll keep on reading. Good job.
Cheers,
The Literary Penguin
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