That was a good poem, but it did not have enough flow, in the first stanza it says "Don’t judge my heart with your logic Don’t cast my tender love aside." i was thinking maybe it would sound better if it was switched as "Don't judged my love with logic, Don't cast my tender heart aside" i think it seems a little more assertive. Rest is good. =D
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