I struggled to get through the beginning of Sylvan's journey. The fade back to the cleric's enigmatic warning may be best suited at the start of the quest. The driving force was eternal life but there was no mention of the reason for this desire until her met a girl that he wanted to share this life with. To Leelah the methods to obtain life eternal were not justified. Explore the human emotions tied to the events. Make dialog more dramatic with Leelah. Dialog with the Cleric I got lost in who was saying what. Sometimes the actions of your characters will describe them better than words.
Thank you for the reminder. I am reminded that love and faith are action words to the Christian life. I an encourage to get off my lazy thinking and put my faith into action. Keep on keeping on. The blessings will over take you as you go along the path.
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