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Review by Frank Riverman Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (3.0)
My initial response is that I like this poem. This response is due, I think, to the simplicity of the first half dozen or so lines which express very well the vulnerability of the speaker and expressed vulnerablity, the voluntary lowering of defence, is always attractive to the audience.

There are a (very) few spelling errors - I think the use of the word ‘queues’ (‘cues’?) is one of these, though I may be wrong as, if it is an error, it is a potentially useful one, accidentally or otherwise having a double meaning and seeming to allude to the queuing of emotions on the other’s face:

There is no need to speak
The words that are on your face
I know what you are gonna say
I may be socially inept
I can read such queues

I find the poem puzzling - and interesting - for its contrast between the vulnerability and self-knowledge expressed in the first part, which is further clarified by an an acknowledgement of wrong-doing:

I know what’s coming next
Many times before
Many times more
I have been here
I deserve it all.....

......I repaid your kindness
Your appreciation for my heart
With the cruxcification of yours
You never stood and chance

Given the self-knowledge of the speaker and the willing acknowledgment of guilt it is difficult for the reader to reconcile this with the fact that the speaker then shrugs the situation off, accepting the consequences, but essentially saying ‘Yes, I hurt you - but, hey, I’ll get over it - tough, baby.’

Overall, I’d say - an interesting, puzzling, slightly discomfiting poem with interesting possibilities. It makes me uncomfortable - but it’s absolutely fine to make the audience uncomfortable!
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