This work peeks my interest in such fine ways. I find myself rereading, finding new interests each time. I like this piece because it throws the word "LOVE" around like a play toy. That for me is a tender word, and for it to be thrown around forces me to lock into this poem. This word, for many, is a powerful and tender word as well. I applaud you and please keep up the writing!
Interesting story here. The structure of the poem could use some work. Focus on rhythm and rhyme especially. consistency in structure could Las help. I always try and read my work aloud to make sure my work flows, maybe give that a try!
The extraterrestrial twist just made my heart drop. I was expecting a ghost story and it turned out to be SYFY!! AWESOME!!!
I'm now sitting here trying to call NASA to tell them not to bring Karen back!!
Incredible style and I love the twist as you can see! I love dialogue in writing. Makes it feel so real which, in horror, thriller, etc... Dialogue just creates such an atmosphere that sits right under the nose. Phenomenal work here!
Keep up the good work!
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