You should always write about your fantasy
you writing skills are good I really enjoyed the story, maybe you could put a little
bit more of back ground story just to make the plot more rich and give more importance
to the role each character will be playing in the scene :)
anyway top work I hope to read more from you :)
It wasnt what I was expecting , i thought it will be more a foot fetish story
but Wasn't bad
If I can suggest you need to slow the pace a little bit and conentrate a bit more on the description of the scenes and the character to give them more importance throughout the story
You can re read the story and correct some mistake and mispelling and give a little bit more
body to some of the chapters
(I really enjoy the chapter when hanna became Kim insole :))
I like the style you can only improve and become even better
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