Good short story the first few sentences is what made me want to keep reading because I wanted to what job he had that people who call unskilled. What I liked the concept of a cart attendant who is tempted to keep or return a lost credit card, mainly because this type of stuff can happen to anyone, plus I like a good mental battle. I can't really tell you anything about spelling or grammar mainly because my grammar can be bad at times when writing, but I really didn't notice any errors.
I found this hard to read, the paragraphs are a little too long, I suggest splitting them up a little because the first paragraph is really two in one. The characters have a good back story, but I really don't see what the story is about I may have missed it but I just didn't see a story in it.
Intersting script. The characters are good and you need that in a zombie style movie. I would have gave it a five our of five but it kind of reminded me of a episode of The Walking Dead. I posted a small part of a script that I am working on called The Scot's Revenge, trying to see what people think about it.
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