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Well, let's get started.
Take me to the middle of the lake and lets stay there for a while. (first of all, lets should be let's with an apostrophe. The intro is very smooth and gently slips the reader into the peice.)
The second and third paragraph are very calming and really puts an emphasis on things by starting multiple sentences with the same words.
Its going to have to be you. (Its needs to be It's)
I want to stop feeling wronged, robbed, betrayed, lied to. (you need an and before lied. Unless taht is just the flow of the peice.)
The last two paragraphs are wonderful. I don't give out many 4's and higher, but your's is deserving of it. The only errors I found were two apostrophes and a missing and. The peice is very emotion and is very is for a reader to get sucked into it. Thank you for the wonderful read.
Feigh Keneigm
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