Very wonderful words to say about any person. yet I feel i must warn you. Don't put so much stock into us human beings, at our very best we are only falible and will hurt one another over and over again. In most cases we don't do it on purpose. No one who loves, hurts the one he/she loves on purpose, but we are weak human beings. please be kind understanding and merciful to this person should they begin to become less than perfect in your eyes. Keep writing!
Seems you've written a nice poem for a friend, and that is always a good thing, your writing is excellent also, I only saw once where I think you kind of just stuck a word in toe complete the sentence but still that's pretty good for someone who doesn't normally write in this genre. I think that's the feeling that I'm getting from you anyway, If I'm wrong pardon me. God bless you.
Awesome! Two thumbs up, creative and interesting, I loved it and by the way you rhyme just fine, take if from someone who rhymes all the time. May the lord bless your hands to keep writing, poetry is my favorite form of writing, I guess grandma did it to me with all that Mother Goose and Dr. Seus!
I like the style of writing but for me it was hard to understand the point of this. Maybe next time you could go for clarity. What I mean by clarity is that whatever it is that is being discussed seems vague to me. In the beginning I thought it was going to lead to something but in the end it was still vague. Keep writing though. other than clarity, this was pretty good.
"Awe, I love this, it's so wonderful, sad yet nostalgic. I love it when people write in a good way about loved ones who've passed on. It's always easier to accept life for what it is instead of fighting against it. This writing helps to teach others to do that. Excellent, please keep writing. God bless you.
Praise the lord, what a wonderful tribute to your mother, she must be a great person. thank you so much for sharing this here. Your writing is excellent, nothing to say but good things, it gave me a warm feeling inside. May the lord bless your hands and your mind to be able to continue to produce such treasure.
very interesting poem, I was kind of confused as to the exact meaning, I would like to clearly understand if you wouldn't mind sending me somehting so that I can get a clearer understanding of it other than that your writing seemed find. God bless you
Wow, this is an awesome poem, the woman who gets this poem should feel really blessed, and beautiful. Thanks for sharing such a wonderful piece of writing. God bless your hands and your mind to continue to produce such wonderful words and to continue to share them here with us.
Praise the lord thank you so much for this, very uplifting and encouraging, and people need to hear positive words of encouragement, and what better story to turn into a motivational poem than the story of David. For if David could do it then we all can. God bless your hands to continue and your mind to be filled with more wonderful things to share.
Praise the lord, can I get an Amen somebody, I can so relate to this poem. Thank you thank you thank you, Encore, bravo and all of that. Yes please continue to allow God to use your mind, soul, and hands, may he richly bless you with more and more wisdom to share each and everyday. God bless you.
A wonderful poem you've written dear friend, as I can relate to this. Excellent! Love the way it rhymes and flows, because I am a lover of rhyme, it reads just perfectly for me but even more so than that, it delivers a message that there are those of us that still long for peace in this here volatile world. Thank you so much for sharing, may the lord bless your minds and your hands to continue.
This is a wonderful read. What a way to bring joy to an otherwise somber situation. I love how her grandfather left her with something special. Letting her know that not only had she felt close to him. But what she felt was now real and validated by the fact that Grandpa left her the key to his biggest treasure. God bless you and may you continue to write such wonderful stories.
powerfully awesome, I love this concept in life, again another poem that speaks of an entire story in just a few simple words, I love this. And it is nice that you realize that the question of what happens is simply that, a question or mystery, because each person tends to react differently to this type of treatment. God bless you and keep writing most enjoyable poetry.
Excellent poem, but please fix your spelling. Other than that excellent poem! I felt the frustration of feeling like you are almost stalked. Wow! Stalked by a memory of something ugly that has happened int he past and still somehow holds you captive. So you say let me be free. You will be free don't worry, writing is therapy. Keep writing, write your way to freedom. thank you for sharing, this is very powerful!
I like this poem, it speaks honestly about mistakes made, and desire for change and confusion as to weather or not that can or will every happen. I love to read writing that is real, this was the very very real, straight from the heart and I loved every minute of it. Keep writing and it is never too late there is always another chance to make things right as long as you are still living and breathing. God bless you.
Wow! Speechless and Amazed! This should be read before an audience. I can only hope to write something as powerful as this in my lifetime. May the lord continue to bless your hands and give you the courage to go forth in your gift despite all odds. I myself am a survivor. I am thoroughly convinced that surviving gives you a certain special something. Something more than you would have had if life would have been a crystal stair. Bravo!
Another very inspiring and very motivational piece. I love it, though at the very last two lines I got kind of lost, and think that for some reason I must be misunderstanding. If not then you might consider going over the last two lines to make certain that they make perfect sense to you. Thank you so much for your poetry. It is my most favorite form of writing and a job to review. God bless your mind and hands!
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Very good story. I feel that there was a moral here. We should care about the welfare of others, in the end the same fate that they received could be our own. Although in the case of chickens. There wouldn't seem to be much that they could do in order to change their fate anyway.
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