Do you ever start eating a yummy burger and it finishes too soon? I felt like I needed a little more with this one. It has nothing to do with the length - sometimes something can be short but perfectly fine. This one just needed a little more meat I thought. Keep writing! Arwa
Well done. Short and to the point. I think you could have made it a better read if maybe you had described what that man he was in love with looked like. I usually enjoy stories a little more if I can picture the characters - it's true of course that an author is gotta leave some space for the readers' imagination but a hint here or there would be nice too. Overall, nice short story! Keep writing! Cheers, Arwa
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