Great story. I enjoyed it very much. You have a real talent for story telling. It takes real talent to think up some of that gruesome stuff. Please continue to write and improve. If you see the vision, words will come. When I write I never know what's coming next. Good luck!
I have been an devoted reader for a long time and trust me I do know good writing when I read it. This was great work! You carried the reader to reality from the beginning to the end. What a catch at the end. Wasn't expecting that, but great surprise ending!
Your poem have the potential to be really good; however to me it is too congested. Everything is too cramped together until the reader gets lost. I think if you organized it beter the reader could get more out of it. I seemed to have a powerful meaning but I found that I got bored because of no consistant format. Stay positive about your work. I am only trying to help. Good luck!
I thought this was excellent work. Great flow of words. I really did enjoy it. Keep up the good work. It was well thought out also. Great ending. Sometime I have a hard time with the ending, but your ending made sense of the entire story. Good Job!
This was marvelous work! I loved every word of it. Great job! I will try to find some more of your work.
I hope others enjoy my work as well as I did yours.
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