Hi, LightinMind

Greetings! I'm Samberine Everose and one of the judges in the

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Quotation Inspiration: Official Contest  (ASR) Use the quote provided to write a story and win big prizes! #1207944 by Writing.Com Support

and I'm here to give you a review in your entry.
Thanks for entering in the contest.


Please note that I am not a professional reviewer, anything I say here is just my humble own opinion and views, don't forget that this will be changed by others perspective also. Take it if you like and drop if you don't like.

MY THOUGHT & IMPRESSION:

at first I was curious about the title and it gave me an impression about romance- reminds me about "Romeo and Juliet.
Then when I went through the body, I first got hooked on the opening part of the story, using an interesting scene or the 'conflict already about what happened to Camila, that made me to continue my reading- you did well on that strategy- hooked the reader on the beginning of the story.
Then as I follow the scene and what will going to happen to Camila- it introducing one by one the different characters- until Francisco.
You did well on that too, on how you introduced to your reader/audience gradually and orderly the different characters in their own personality.
Until I was already fell in the story and I didn't expecting that I already had reach the end.
It's a beautiful romance story, not mushy and vulgar, the language that you've used is just fine to reach any range of reader or audience. I like your style in showing. Well Done!

MY DOUBT & SUGGESTION:
I didn't find any words that distract the flow and no doubts arise. Good luck!

Thank you for your participation in the contest.
I hope to see and read more of your works again!

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Hi, Kåre Enga in Montana

Greetings! I'm Samberine Everose and one of the judges in the

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Quotation Inspiration: Official Contest  (ASR) Use the quote provided to write a story and win big prizes! #1207944 by Writing.Com Support

and I'm here to give you a review in your entry.
Thanks for entering in the contest.


Please note that I am not a professional reviewer, anything I say here is just my humble own opinion and views, don't forget that this will be changed by others perspective also. Take it if you like and drop if you don't like.

MY THOUGHT & IMPRESSION:
The story is emotional and the given title is poetic.
I liked how the story goes, the flow the way how you weaved properly the dialogue showing each character's personality, that is not in an obvious way.
The Plot is also simple, and the given theme is attached in there, it is a part, and it goes naturally, not forcefully.
I liked the way how you also set the setting in the beginning of the story, it makes the reader be prepared on what will be expected. Well Done!


MY DOUBT & SUGGESTION:

Thank you for your participation in the contest.
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Hi, Mastiff

Greetings! I'm Samberine Everose and the sole judge in the

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Word Chef Master Contest-Season 2  (E) Word Chef Master Contest-CLOSED NOW! #2172116 by Samberine Everose

and I'm here to give you a review in your entry.
Thanks for entering in the contest.


Please note that I am not a professional reviewer, anything I say here is just my humble own opinion and views, don't forget that this will be changed by others perspective also. Take it if you like and drop if you don't like.

MY THOUGHT & IMPRESSION:
Banana can always be a good main ingredients specially when use to blend and tops with a bread, and this recipe is so true.
I liked how you combined the different fruit emoticons here, it adds colors and I know as the one word end said, its delicious. Good Job!


MY DOUBT & SUGGESTION:
I didn't find words that may distract the flow and no doubt arise. Good luck!

Thank you for your participation in the contest.
I hope to see and read more of your works again!

Just keep On smiling while stay in WRITING!

Hi, 🎼 RRodgersWrites 🎶

Greetings! I'm Samberine Everose and one of the judges in the

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Word Chef Master Contest-Season 2  (E) Word Chef Master Contest-CLOSED NOW! #2172116 by Samberine Everose

and I'm here to give you a review in your entry.
Thanks for entering in the contest.


Please note that I am not a professional reviewer, anything I say here is just my humble own opinion and views, don't forget that this will be changed by others perspective also. Take it if you like and drop if you don't like.

MY THOUGHT & IMPRESSION:
This dish is something new to me, the image is already sounds delicious,it blends with the created words in the form of Cinquain.I think the main ingredients here is fish, I liked also the formation of the emoticons on the second line, it really states its ingredients. Good Job!


MY DOUBT & SUGGESTION:
I didn't find words that may distract the flow and no doubt arise. Goodluck!

Thank you for your participation in the contest.
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Hi, Christopher Roy Denton

Greetings! I'm Samberine Everose and the judge in the

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Chilli con Carne  (E) My favourite food recipe expressed as a cinquain (with British spelling) #2224238 by Christopher Roy Denton

and I'm here to give you a review in your entry.
Thanks for entering in the contest.


Please note that I am not a professional reviewer, anything I say here is just my humble own opinion and views, don't forget that this will be changed by others perspective also. Take it if you like and drop if you don't like.

MY THOUGHT & IMPRESSION:
While looking at the title, we also have a menu here in the Philippines, same as chili con carne,but I liked how you expressed here the menu, adding words that shows what it feels when taste this. I liked also the formation of the words, the first Cinquain form consist of the ingredients using the emoticons, while the second cinquain the feelings when we already taste this menu, and I liked the last sentence, it gives a touch of sentimental or a remembrance. Well done!


MY DOUBT & SUGGESTION:
I didn't find words that may distract the flow and no doubt arise. Good luck!

Thank you for your participation in the contest.
I hope to see and read more of your works again!

Just keep On smiling while stay in WRITING!

Hi, Toffeeman1957

Greetings! I'm Samberine Everose and one of the judges in the

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Quotation Inspiration: Official Contest  (ASR) Use the quote provided to write a story and win big prizes! #1207944 by Writing.Com Support

and I'm here to give you a review in your entry.
Thanks for entering in the contest.


Please note that I am not a professional reviewer, anything I say here is just my humble own opinion and views, don't forget that this will be changed by others perspective also. Take it if you like and drop if you don't like.

MY THOUGHT & IMPRESSION:
This is a good story, even of the given title is simple, it gives an interesting impression.
The plot is simple also, but gives an impact especially after finishing it, in where it gives a tragedy ending, left me the reader to learn and want to know what happened to Denise.
The words flow smoothly, though there are words that filter sometimes the audience. Good Job!


MY DOUBT & SUGGESTION:
My only doubt is, though the given title is quite interesting, but it will be much more interested if you will add some more words to be get intrigue on it, like stirring your audience and hook them more.
Other than that, there are no doubts arise, Goodluck!

Thank you for your participation in the contest.
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Hi, Roberts89

Greetings! I'm Samberine Everose and one of the judges in the

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Quotation Inspiration: Official Contest  (ASR) Use the quote provided to write a story and win big prizes! #1207944 by Writing.Com Support

and I'm here to give you a review in your entry.
Thanks for entering in the contest.


Please note that I am not a professional reviewer, anything I say here is just my humble own opinion and views, don't forget that this will be changed by others perspective also. Take it if you like and drop if you don't like.

MY THOUGHT & IMPRESSION:
The given title is simple but it links to the given prompt of the contest.
I liked the way how you begin the body of your story, its friendly and have a smooth flow in where it letting me your reader to know more about the story. You did good in hooking me to be in the shoes of your first character.
The scene of the story flows smooth and every time there is a scene, its add more for me the reader to get the information, like knowing the characters and the subject or topic of the story.
I liked also how it ended, and the emotions that were begin and into settled.


MY DOUBT & SUGGESTION:
I didn't find words that may distract the flow but I have some few doubts that arises while reading the story.
The Space Break- using this gives enhance to a story, it gives the reader to have a break and to ponder what the story is reflecting.
The Font- though this are small thing that we miss-looked, but it gives and helps to enhance the clarity of the story.
There are some words that also misspelled. Other than that, no doubts already arise. Goodluck!

Thank you for your participation in the contest.
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Hi, Graham B.

Greetings! I'm Samberine Everose and one of the judges in the

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Quotation Inspiration: Official Contest  (ASR) Use the quote provided to write a story and win big prizes! #1207944 by Writing.Com Support

and I'm here to give you a review in your entry.
Thanks for entering in the contest.


Please note that I am not a professional reviewer, anything I say here is just my humble own opinion and views, don't forget that this will be changed by others perspective also. Take it if you like and drop if you don't like.

MY THOUGHT & IMPRESSION:
This is a good story within a journey between two friends, and you did well in linking it to the given prompt.
The way you show it is dramatize through the scene that you've added on how the way they were in their dialogue, this is where I got some few information about the two characters.
I also liked that you gave an action scene/tragedy on what happened to one of your character, giving your audience to feel sad at the ending part, but it enhance the story to break its monotonous and this gives an impact.


MY DOUBT & SUGGESTION:
I didn't find words that may distract the flow, but I have few doubts that arises while reading this piece of yours.
Its good that there is a dialogue part in the story, this is where you used in letting your audience to know your characters, but overusing a method sometimes turns a piece to become a monotonous., I would like to suggest that in the middle part there is a scene or a break scene that will serve as a gap to break the monotonous. Other than that, there are no doubts were being arise. Goodluck!

Thank you for your participation in the contest.
I hope to see and read more of your works again!

Just keep On smiling while stay in WRITING!

Hi, Odessa Molinari

Greetings! I'm Samberine Everose and one of the judges in the

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Quotation Inspiration: Official Contest  (ASR) Use the quote provided to write a story and win big prizes! #1207944 by Writing.Com Support

and I'm here to give you a review in your entry.
Thanks for entering in the contest.


Please note that I am not a professional reviewer, anything I say here is just my humble own opinion and views, don't forget that this will be changed by others perspective also. Take it if you like and drop if you don't like.

MY THOUGHT & IMPRESSION:
The given title is mystery, and gives an impression to be a horror story, but when I begin reading it, you did well to hook the reader in the beginning part. I liked the technique on how you made your reader to be in the shoes of the first character, maybe by choosing the first point of view method, so I was also intrigue like your character about Suri.
I also liked on how the simplicity of the story went through, but it gives a thought on the middle part and a conclusion on the ending part.
The way how you chose and blend words is easy to reach, any audience can easily understood it.
I liked the story, its simple but properly formed.

MY DOUBT & SUGGESTION:
I didn't find words that may distract the flow and no doubt arise. Goodluck!

Thank you for your participation in the contest.
I hope to see and read more of your works again!

Just keep On smiling while stay in WRITING!

Hi, 💙 Carly - aka Joan Watson

Greetings! I'm Samberine Everose and one of the judges in the

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Quotation Inspiration: Official Contest  (ASR) Use the quote provided to write a story and win big prizes! #1207944 by Writing.Com Support

and I'm here to give you a review in your entry.
Thanks for entering in the contest.


Please note that I am not a professional reviewer, anything I say here is just my humble own opinion and views, don't forget that this will be changed by others perspective also. Take it if you like and drop if you don't like.

MY THOUGHT & IMPRESSION:
When my eyes stumbled on the given title, it gave me to ponder to link the given title to the given prompt of the contest, and I understood it simply. The word Faith gave a strong impact in the given title.
I've seen that you used the dialogue method in delivering your story, its good, dialogue enhanced the impression of the reader that the character is moving because on the way they talk.
I liked how you begin, I found some smooth flow of the story.
This is only a simple- a conversation, but it talks that our faith may not be motivates without our friends, sometimes.


MY DOUBT & SUGGESTION:
I have some few doubts for you to consider, just like I've said I liked how you begin the story, there is a smooth flow, I liked the combination of the dialogue method and the narrative method, but why on its succeeding lines, the flow that were being first introduced were being left already on the beginning part.
I was lost when only a dialogue method were being used already, not describing the characters moving, or how they expressed their words.
It just only their dialogue, there are also instances that I your reader didn't know already who said a word.
Other than that, I have no other doubt arise. Good luck!

Thank you for your participation in the contest.
I hope to see and read more of your works again!

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