I love the message and the hope that this poem brings. He has done all these things, and to hope to be like his son is right. I love the line He took my Impurities exchanged for his light
I am no longer lonely, or afraid of the night” But the rest is a little long. The beat gets a little lost in the length.
Wow. This is really great. I couldn't stop myself from reading. I absolutely loved how you added that last stanza - that repeated - at t the end. It captures so much emotion and though there were some interesting beat changes, I really liked this. Great job!
What a wonderful little poem. Honestly, the only line I am not too terribly fond of is the last line in each stanza. I read it first with the last line and the second time, I just read it without the last line and I loved the flow. I love the message and it is very moving.
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