e:bigsmile} Thank-you for writing and posting your experience at the first convention.
I had been wondering about the convention after I first heard about it. What do they do? What do they talk about? Is is a seminar or just to go meet people and have fun?
Things I liked about it: This too was funny! What we learn when starting a new project! Where did you finally end up putting the fountain! I'm guessing the middle of the coffee table in the living room.
Some suggestions: Not a thing. Your article was very entertaining.
Keep on writing, and thank-you for sharing your thoughts on home hobbies1
e:bigsmile} Thank-you for letting me read your bio.
Your house and family sound wonderful. A 100 year old home, that must be a challange. I envy you because I too like to restore and redo old homes. I find them facinating. All the little nooks and cranny's and places to put your beloved items on display. Old homes are the best! They hold so many memories.
Thank-you for sharing a little of your life with all of us at writing.com.
Regards,
Erythrite the Pirate.
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e:bigsmile} Thank-you for letting me read your poem.
Things I liked about it: I like your poem very much. It threw up all kinds of images to my mind. ...greedy watch fire...frigid bridge...crackling maple.
Very nice...Thank-you for writing this and for sharing.
Ooooooh! I get it now, I thought they were ghosts watching their funeral. I see now that they only faked Toms Death. I don't know if I like the charactor Dylan or not. Faking someones death to avoid their parents seems to be a cowardly answer. But maybe that's your point because Tom did try to kill himself? Maybe you could explain the reason why they did what they did a little more so that we could feel more sympathy for them, if that is what you intended?
There are only a couple punctuation errors that a quick read through would fix up, like you said, it's a rough draft.
I liked your story, I'm not used to reading screen plays, but I thought that you were able to convey alot of information with just the dialogue.
Keep writing, I would be interested in reading more as you complete it.
Things I liked about it: Tom sounds like a lonely guy. You start your story out at the end and then work us back to the beginning. This is a strong start and I like it very much.
Some suggestions: The main charactor starts out shy, unable to speak in class, afraid of everyone. But then in the movie theator he lets a stranger touch him. I feel that this would be out of charactor for what you have set up for the reader. If the two already know each other maybe you could explain this further.
I think your screenplay is off to a good start. Your charactors seem real.
I would really like to know more about your charactors and to see where your story is heading.
Erythrite
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Thank-you for letting me read your poems. 
I thought your poem was a very nice eulogy for your mother.