I liked the story, or really I liked the writing, it was easy to read and didn't involve a lot of complications. But I didn't really get the point of it all. Like, I understand the father made peace with his family and did something good for the community but I think because you never described what was important to him and his character, he just kind of seemed like an empty shell and I didn't feel so happy for him at the end because he didn't seem real to me.
I don't know, I hope this helps. But obviously you have a talent for putting words together and being understandable so good luck.xx
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