I really enjoy the form of this poem. While short, it gets a lot across.
In the first stanza I love the idea of not being beautiful "for any reason or any person." It's a very strong personal statement and a forceful way to begin a poem. I also enjoy the thought "I am lost, forever dimmed, muddled, and helpless." It flows extremely well.
I'm not sure I like the last stanza as much as the rest of the poem. Since the word "changing" is used in the second stanza, I think you should use a different word than "change" to keep the wording fresh (since the poem is so short). I also think it would have been stronger with perhaps a different verb than "weep," which is too common for the emotion you are trying to convey, in my opinion.
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