This is a cute poem. I like the blast, last, stop and pop they are cute and I can see this coming through a child's eye. I am not an expert but I liked how you took something sweet and simple and made it fun from a child's perspective. I also liked the fact that you tell how you can't hold bubble's very long, unfortunately that's the sad part for a child .
But your poem is very visual.
Wow! I love it! When you looked at mine i decided to check yours out and i was so glad I did. This was the first one I checked out and I want you to know you most defiantly have a book inside you or several books. I will be looking forward to reading more of your work! Great Job!
Awesome!! very well put, my Blessings to you for your service. Your poem show's emotion, love, and patriotism. It brings with it history and reminder why we are Americans. Your choice of words were exceptional! I even read it again! Thanks for sharing
I am pretty new but I just would like to express how much I enjoyed your poem. The story caused me to take on the character of the teacher,. You expressed everything so clear and your writing feels like you are a person of order. I don't know if you really are a teacher, but if your not you sure can place yourself in her shoes I could even visualize what she looked like. I also liked some of the words that you chose to rhyme together they were simple yet unexpected. Good Piece! i will enjoy reading it to my Granddaughter. Write On!
I really enjoyed your children’s poetry especially the one about the shoes. I really could visualize this in a book reading it to my grandchildren. Good Work!
i really enjoyed reading this poem it was smooth and easy to read I like the choice of some of your words, yet you used some familiar words or phrases that one as a Christian can relate to.
I await my flight to a better place.
To see forever God's glorious face.
With the angels I will sing along.
Love Lifted Me my favorite song.
On that day I will have no regrets.
Go with God on the day He's set.
Joy in heaven but sorrow on earth.
Join my God who created my birth.
I am new so I am not a critic I can only tell you what I think; I thought this was great!I It is soft and tender you could feel the love and amazement of a small life that you held. You brought me there in the room with you.
I really can't help with the critique of it all but i enjoyed reading your poem. I could feel the struggle from within. It shows the process of what Paul said in the Bible, "The things I feared the most came upon me". Thanks for sharing. It's All Good!
I am fairly new at this but I wanted to comment on your story. Wow! I totally enjoyed it, it was fresh and clean and it was so descriptive that I easily followed the story. (which usually hard for me, I bore easily) What I also liked about it was the emotion that emanated from this story and how each sentence had richness to it. The thought provoking ending causing us to evaluate our lives to see if we too may reach out in love toward others.
I am sorry, as far as negative or iron against iron comments I don't have it,but I know that I thought it was excellent work. I should hope to be as blessed to write so well.
God Bless!
I'm really, really new at this, but i totally enjoyed this story, it caused me to look beyond (my Imagination what I was reading. It brought me right into the characters and the scene, It sparked my drive to obtain imagination.
i usually get very, very bored with a lot of writings but this story caught my interest. My only problem with this story is…. It ended to soon. This is a story that I would read to my grandkids,
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