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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi there!

You reviewed something of mine earlier and I wanted to return the favor!

Thank you for sharing your work! I thought this was really clever and profound. The menu items were really chef d'oeuvres, actually, even if bitter to enjoy and digest. Spoke a lot to the nature of humans and what we will consume in the name of satisfaction. I didn't see any errors in grammar, spelling, and punctuation, so that's always a plus.

Keep up the good work and write on!

Respectfully,

Elizabeth John


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Review of You Think of You  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Hi there!

You reviewed something of mine earlier and I wanted to return the favor!

Thank you for sharing your work. This was an interesting piece of writing, but I was a bit confused at first. Initially I thought the couple was fighting each other, but as I continued to read, it seemed more like they were fighting about one person's sense of self. If so, I think you may want to edit some of the first stanza so that it is more clear that that is your intent. As I read through the last stanza, I felt that it was much stronger and the point was more solidly expressed. However, this is just my opinion; please use or discard anything I mentioned as you see fit.

I didn't see any errors in grammar, spelling, or punctuation, so that's always a plus. Keep up the good work and write on!

Thank you!

Respectfully,

Elizabeth John


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Review of My Dearest  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi there!

You reviewed something of mine and I wanted to return the favor!

Thank you for sharing your work. This was a lovely piece of writing. I thought it was rather profound and many people will be able to relate & appreciate it. I didn't see any errors in grammar, spelling, or punctuation, so that's always a plus.

Keep up the good work and write on!

Elizabeth John


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Review of BEST INVESTMENT  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Hello!

You reviewed something of mine and I wanted to return the favor!

Thank you for sharing your work. I thought this was a simple piece of writing that was very thoughtful and introspective. I think we can all appreciate the nature of investing in ourselves for maximum personal growth.

Keep up the good work and write on!

Respectfully,

Elizabeth John


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Rated: ASR | (4.0)
Hello!

You reviewed something of mine and I wanted to return the favor!

Thank you for sharing your work. I thought this piece was very interesting; in all honesty, it spoke to me because I am a teacher so I could relate to some of your thoughts on this topic. The first two paragraphs in particular resonated with me, because these are issues we deal with everyday. I would say that I don't agree that teachers shoudl carry guns, but that's just me.

Keep up the good work and write on!

Elizabeth John


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Review of Solar rider  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi there!

Thank you for sharing your work. I liked this--I love a good story-poem! I thought the rhyme and meter was pretty good except for two spots. I would change them because it through of the rhythm quite a bit and I stumbled when reading them:

I would change "a thousand kilometres" to " a thousand miles" because there are too many syllables with kilometres.

And I would also revisit "I refused to leave the field". I would change it to "I stayed the field" or something like that because again, there are too many syllables in your original sentence and it throws off the rhythm.

Regardless, these are just suggestions. Use or discard them as you see fit.

Keep up the good work and write on!

Respectfully,

Elizabeth John


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Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
Hi there!

You reviewed something of mine earlier and I wanted to return the favor!

Thank you for sharing your work. This was an interesting piece of writing and I think it will resonate with a lot of readers because I believe we have all been in that situation at one time or another where we ask the question if the one we consider our significant other really cares about us or not...

You do have a few typos and spelling errors here and there, so I would review your piece for those errors.

Keep up the good work and write on!

Respectfully,

Elizabeth John


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Rated: E | (3.5)
Hi there!

You reviewed something of mine earlier and I wanted to return the favor!

Thank you for sharing your work. I thought this was a light and fun poem for your love. I don't know if it was well-developed as a poem because it just feels like a series of statements put together as a stanza, but I think the poem resonates because everyone relates to that first love---even better if you're still together!

Keep up the good work and write on!

Respectfully,

Elizabeth John


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Review of Birdhouse  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi there!

You reviewed something of mine yesterday and I wanted to return the favor!

Thank you for sharing your work. I picked it because I saw it didn't have any reviews--I'm happy to be the first to review this piece. The one thing that stands out for me is how visual everything is in your poem. It was so easy to read this poem and have the scene unfold before my eyes--and what a lovely scene it was! Very picturesque.

My only criticism would be that there seem to be a few typos (errors in punctuation). I personally would not capitalize the first letter of the first word of line two, stanza one. Same for the second and third line of stanza three. Lastly, in the second line of the last stanza, "dasn't" should be "doesn't". I would also take out the dash at the beginning of the second line of the second stanza. The first line of that stanza ends with a question mark, so the reader knows to come to a full stop; there is no need to start the next line with a dash.

Despite those small things, I think the poem itself is light and delightful. Please disregard anything you disagree with.

Keep up the good work and write on!

Respectfully,

Elizabeth John


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Review of Siege of Syracuse  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hey there!

I was just passing through, and I wanted to say that I loved this! It was just beautiful....lovely sentiment and nice imagery!

Keep up the good work and write on!

Eliz John


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Review of The ghost  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi there!

You reviewed something of mine earlier and I wanted to return the favor!

Thank you for sharing your work. I think we all have an old trunk full of memories that at one time seemed to much handle or carry, only to have time show us otherwise. Lovely rhyme scheme, even lovlier sentiment.

Keep up the good work and write on!

Respectfully,

Elizabeth John


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Review of The Perfect Gift  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi there!

I was just passing through and I wanted to say that you did a great job meeting the challenge of the prompt! And it was a cute story! Definitely made me smile...

I didn't see any errors in grammar, spelling, and punctuation, so that's always a plus.

Keep up the good work and write on!

Respectfully,

Elizabeth John


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Review of Together  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi there!

You reviewed something of mine a few days ago and I wanted to return the favor!

Thank you for sharing your work. This piece was lovely and very telling. I think it is well-crafted, and the writing was succinct. I didn't see any errors in spelling, grammar and punctuation, so that's always a plus.

Keep up the good work and write on!

Respectfully,

Elizabeth John


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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Hi there!

You reviewed something of mine a few days ago and I wanted to return the favor!

Thank you for sharing your work. I liked this poem and thought it was full of fun and whimsy--although I would question inter-species dating. *Pthb*

In any case, the poem was very imaginative and I was very easily able to visualize the main characters in the sea and in the air; I imagined the owl courting the mermaid on a moonlit night...

I didn't see any errors in spelling, grammar, or punctuation, so that's always a plus.
Keep up the good work and write on!

Respectfully,

Elizabeth John


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Review of Forever Dark  Open in new Window.
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Rated: ASR | (4.0)
Hi there!

You reviewed something of mine recently, and I wanted to return the favor!

Thank you for sharing your work. This was a good read, if a bit dark. It was simple in message and tone, and I personally really liked that. I didn't see any errors in spelling, grammar, or punctuation, so that's always a plus.

Keep up the good work and write on!

Respectfully,

Elizabeth John


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Review of Sleepy Hollow  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi there!

You reviewed something of mine earlier and I wanted to return the favor!

Thank you for sharing your work. This was a lovely piece of writing. I enjoyed the imagery that you evoked, especially in the last stanza. I didn't see any errors in grammar, spelling, or punctuation, so that's always a plus.

Keep up the good work and write on!

Respectfully,

Elizabeth John


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Review of We Bloomed  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi there!

You reviewed something of mine a few days ago and I wanted to return the favor! *Smile*

Thank you for sharing your work. I loved this. I thought it was so sweet and I smiled as a read it. I did try to put it to music in my head....but let's just say there's a reason I'm not a musician. LOL

Keep up the good work and write on!

Respectfully,

Elizabeth John


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Review of Twister  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi there!

You reviewed something of mine last week and I wanted to return the favor.

Thank you for sharing your work. This was very descriptive, and it was easy to visualize the scene as well as feel the emotions of the moment. I also got that sense of calm that happens after the storm has passed...although before you survey the damage, of course.

Keep up the good work and write on!

Respectfully,

Eliz John


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Review of BANANAS  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Hello!

You reviewed something of mine earlier and I wanted to return the favor!

Thank you for sharing your work. This read more like an essay or a journal entry to me, and it just shared the importance of bananas in your culture. So many great things to do with bananas!

Keep up the good work and write on!

Respectfully,

Elizabeth John


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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Hi there!

You reviewed something of mine earlier and I wanted to return the favor!

Thank you for sharing your work. This definitely was kind of "lousy", but still fun nonetheless. I hope this wasn't based on a true story!

Keep having fun with your writing!

Respectfully,

Elizabeth John


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Rated: ASR | (4.0)
Hi there!

You reviewed something of mine a while back and I wanted to return the favor!

Thank you for sharing your work! I thought this poem was absolutely adorable and I enjoyed the tale you told (I love narrative poetry!). The poem was very descriptive and I was easily able to imagine the little dragon doing his thing.

Keep up the good work and write on!

Elizabeth John


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Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
Hi there!

You reviewed something of mine earlier and I wanted to return the favor!

Thank you for sharing your work. This piece was interesting, but it does need some work. The main thing that bothered me was the rod in his shin. The idea that he was "tending to patients" while there was metal rod seems illogical to me. I would think it would A) impede his ability to walk,and would NOT go unnoticed and B) it would cause a considerable amount of pain, certainly more worthy of that just a "sigh" of inconvenience, because that is how it felt when I read it. Additionally, because there were bumps on the rod, I imagine this would have been excruciating and would have elicited more than just a "sigh".

There were a couple of problems with the tense as well. It shifted a little bit from present to past in some places.

Otherwise, this piece was intriguing. I was wondering what brought about all this upheaval, for sure. However, please know that these are just suggestions. Take them or leave them as you see fit.

Keep up the good work and write on!

Respectfully,

Elizabeth John


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Review of Tear Soup  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi there!

You reviewed something of mine earlier and I wanted to return the favor!

Thank you for sharing your work. What a lovely and poignant tribute to your mother. It is tender and soft, but captures a lot of the grief we often feel when we lose someone close to us. I liked how the ingredients were things that were dear to her...they only work to sweeten and tenderize the "meal".

I didn't see any errors in spelling, grammar, and punctuation, so that's always a plus. Keep up the good work and write on!

Respectfully,

Elizabeth John


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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi there!

You reviewed something of mine earlier and I wanted to return the favor!

Thank you for sharing your work. When I went looking through your portfolio, I found this same prompt that you reviewed of mine...You did a great job with this! There's a reason you won first place! It's always fun to see how people take the same prompt and interpret it. I love that.

In any case, what I liked about this is the fact that it's so descriptive, especially the second stanza. The action in the poem was very easy to visualize, and left a lasting impression of memories and summers past...

I didn't see any errors in spelling, grammar, and punctuation, so that's always a plus!

Keep up the good work and write on!

Respectfully,

Elizabeth John


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Rated: 13+ | (3.0)
Hi there!

You reviewed something of mine earlier and I wanted to return the favor!

Thank you for sharing your work. I thought this was an interesting piece of writing, but I don't think this is quite a haiku. A true haiku consists of three lines (which you have) but there is a syllable requirement that you have to meet as well. The first line should have five syllables, the second should have 7 syllables, and the last line will have five syllables. Generally, haikus usually talk about nature, but nowadays, I've noticed people don't follow that rule that closely anymore. In any case, maybe you want to revisit this so you can make it more like a haiku in the truer sense.

Keep up the good work and write on!

Respectfully,

Elizabeth John


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