I have to rate this poem a five because (1.) It is short,(2.) this poem says so much in such a short amount of space and time like we live, We all live in our spaces and we live on our time but we don't know how much of both we really have. "Often,when a flower wilts, we put another in the vase." That line is good I think when the flower has wilted and died we should leave the vase empty for three days for mourning beauties loss. What do you think?
Please keep writing and honnor and keep your mentors memory close to your heart as you write that's how they will achive eternal life.
This poem was a some what ryhming poem I am not a big fan of rhyme but other than that I feel the poem has a great flow and the voice of the poem gave me clear images of your thoughts and direction as to where you went with this poem.
when I read a poem I like to see the pictures unfold like a film in my minds camera eye and you did it with this write I like the use of metaphore in this good work there.
With rhyming poems some just come off too sing song if you know what I mean.
Great job on this write. :):):):)
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