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Review of Our Father...  Open in new Window.
Review by Kermit Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)

Your acknowledgment:

"And in the times the answer doesn’t look the way I thought it would help me to understand that when I ask for something that is not in Your will, Your “no” or “wait” means that Your will for me is much larger and more loving than anything I ever could have imagined for myself."

reminds me of the story:

A mother told her daughter: Darling, I'm sorry God did not answer your prayer.

The daughter says: But he did answer. He said "No".

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Review of The Garret  Open in new Window.
Review by Kermit Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
'He had been estranged from his family for the past five years since "coming out of the closet" '

It is a hint that Sean is gay. I wondered how it was important to the story.

You provided a very clever answer.

I liked your hints that the cat was as intelligent as a human.

I wondered how Elizabeth Faked her death to have Sean summoned to inherit the house.

Would her home be searched for her body if she quit interacting with her attorney?

Did she request her Attorney to lie to Sean?



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Review of The Heroic Heart  Open in new Window.
Review by Kermit Author IconMail Icon
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Love begets love.

I am impressed by your consistent rhyme pattern.

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Review by Kermit Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
You wrote a nice drama.

The conclusion was less satisfactory than I expected.

Zawb realized that his weasel fur value had instantly risen from least to greatest.

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Review by Kermit Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
Your poem:
B 2 or not B 2,
While backstage at Ashland,
Vending machine in view,
My pocket change at hand.
Know I not, what to do.
Zounds! A bad choice - 'tis bland.
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Ahhh, I see.
You wrote B2 instead of 2B to rhyme with "view".

The vending machine was an uninteresting choice.
Did he choose it anyway?

We don't know what choice was made.
It is ok. The point is that a choice needs to be made.

Clever editing was done to maintain the rhyme scheme.



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Review by Kermit Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
We walk through life toward non-life.
It does not matter how long we live.
What matters is how we enjoy the life we have.
What activities besides eating and sleeping do we enjoy?

In my teenage years, I walked several miles almost every day.

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Review of The Amulet  Open in new Window.
Review by Kermit Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)
I enjoyed this section.

Have you written sequels to it?

If you wish to make the story take up more pages, you could convert some of the "tells" to "shows".

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Review by Kermit Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Sandeva.

I enjoyed your article. My own opinion about prayer is that it is redundant. Asking God to give you an item is useful only if it motivates you to get it yourself. God has given you the ability to work for it.

My friends commonly pray for others' needs to be satisfied.

I have no jealousy of others. I tend to take God's gifts for granted.

It made no sense to me that God wished us to love him (or her, or it).

I think of God as the mind or soul of the universe

I don't say God created the universe. I say the universe is God's body. Everything that happens corresponds to God's thoughts.

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Review by Kermit Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello Louis.

Tears came to my eyes as I read your story.

Jackson is a good kid who is helping the lady. He regretted his original disdain for her.

It amused me that he held his breath while hugging her.


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Review of Vanishing Act  Open in new Window.
Review by Kermit Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello HuntersMoon.


"wiping their collective memories,"

confused me. I thought you meant Peter wiped the captain's and his (Peter's) memories.

But you must have meant that he wiped the captain's and the Major's memories. I misinterpreted this because I had not noticed the Major being distinct from the Captain.
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Review of Alphabet Party  Open in new Window.
Review by Kermit Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
Thank you.

I have written a similar "ABC lesson".

I will post it.



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Review of Snowflake  Open in new Window.
Review by Kermit Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)
Thank you for your poem. I agree with the advice it gives.

Kermit
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Review of Puff and Belle  Open in new Window.
Review by Kermit Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Amethyst Snow Angel.

I've enjoyed your story
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Review of The Golden Pool  Open in new Window.
Review by Kermit Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)

Review of the Golden Pool:

Tears came to my eyes as I read Hollana's bedside grieving.

On first reading of
"She plunged into the water as if it were a pool of nightmares.",
I imagined her diving head-first into the pool.

The next sentence,
"The force of power seemed to accumulate against her every step."
clarified it.

The references, "cold as fire", and "burned within her like a blaze of absolute ice",
puzzled me.

I found https://www.healthline.com/health/ice-burn on the internet to help me understand.

I did not know the meaning of "balls of her feet".
I read the meaning at https://idioms.thefreedictionary.com/balls+of+her+...
.

I speculate that "his abused features" hint that he was abused as a child.


I like Hollana's statement in the last line of the story, "I am Mother Earth!”.

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Review of time machine  Open in new Window.
Review by Kermit Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello, bethanymandl7.

I like your poetic essay.

It is true.

Kermit
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Review of The Fairy's Hovel  Open in new Window.
Review by Kermit Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello

I laughed at your story ending. Thank you

The fairy, Jessica, greets a human reporter for an interview.

When the human first sees Jessica, she has doubts that she is seeing a fairy.

At we end of the story, we discover the cause of her doubt.
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Review of Wishing Well  Open in new Window.
Review by Kermit Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Thank you.

I enjoyed reading your story.

I like it when Droleen ensures the wish is fair before granting it.

I had to read the first few sentences twice to understand their meaning.

All the remaining sentences were easy.

In the end, everyone is reasonably happy.

Gretta has adapted well to her situation.



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Review by Kermit Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)
I like your description of the "Thankful Day" holiday.

I agree that gratitude is helpful to us.

I searched the internet for additional benefits of gratitude.

On the webpage,


https://www.psychologytoday.com/us/blog/what-menta...

I found the following.

Amy Morin

Here are seven scientifically proven benefits:

Gratitude opens the door to more relationships. Not only does saying “thank you” constitute good manners, but showing appreciation can help you win new friends, according to a 2014 study published in Emotion. The study found that thanking a new acquaintance makes them more likely to seek an ongoing relationship. So whether you thank a stranger for holding the door or send a thank-you note to that colleague who helped you with a project, acknowledging other people’s contributions can lead to new opportunities.

Gratitude improves physical health. According to a 2012 study published in Personality and Individual Differences, Grateful people experience fewer aches and pains and report feeling healthier than others. Not surprisingly, grateful people are also more likely to take care of their health. They exercise more often and are more likely to attend regular check-ups.

Gratitude improves psychological health. Gratitude reduces many toxic emotions, from envy and resentment to frustration and regret. Robert Emmons, a leading gratitude researcher, has conducted multiple studies on the link between gratitude and well-being. His research confirms that gratitude effectively increases happiness and reduces depression.

Gratitude enhances empathy and reduces aggression. Grateful people are more likely to behave in a prosocial manner, even when others behave less kindly, according to a 2012 study by the University of Kentucky. Study participants who ranked higher on gratitude scales were less likely to retaliate against others, even when given negative feedback. They experienced more sensitivity and empathy toward other people and a decreased desire to seek revenge.

Grateful people sleep better. According to a 2011 study published in Applied Psychology, writing a gratitude journal improves Sleep, Health, and Well-Being. Spend just 15 minutes jotting down a few grateful sentiments before bed, and you may sleep better and longer.

Gratitude improves self-esteem. A 2014 study published in the Journal of Applied Sport Psychology found that gratitude increased athletes’ self-esteem, an essential component of optimal performance. Other studies have shown that gratitude reduces social comparisons. Rather than resenting people with more money or better jobs—a major factor in reduced self-esteem—grateful people can appreciate other people’s accomplishments.

Gratitude increases mental strength. For years, research has shown gratitude not only reduces stress, but it may also play a major role in overcoming trauma. A 2006 study published in Behavior Research and Therapy found that Vietnam War veterans with higher levels of gratitude experienced lower rates of post-traumatic stress disorder. A 2003 study published in the Journal of Personality and Social Psychology found that gratitude was a major contributor to resilience following the terrorist attacks on September 11. Recognizing all you must be thankful for —even during the worst times—fosters resilience.

We all have the ability and opportunity to cultivate gratitude. Rather than complain about the things you think you deserve, take a few moments to focus on all that you have. Developing an “attitude of gratitude” is one of the simplest ways to improve your satisfaction with life.

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