This had me tearing up by the time I reached the end.
The sentence structure is good, the paragraphs flow, and you give the reader a good sense of what is coming by the time they reach the end.
The only piece of advice I would offer is related to the sentence, "On silent feet he came to her, in the darkness of the night." I think it would sound a bit better if reworded into, "On silent feet, in the darkness of the night, he came to her."
I thoroughly enjoyed reading this piece. :)
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