This was just wonderful! I love the way it is put in to a "diary". I do wish you had a few more entries like the one with the clothes rack. Way too funny.
I really like the way you could get me to see every detail of what was going on, like I was right there in the room with you.
This was a very captivating story. It just happens to be one of my biggest fears! Even though I knew where you were going with it, (and I cringed at the thought) I still had to keep reading! This has to be one of the best short stories i have read this year. Keep up the good work!
Jenn
OMG! This is just what I needed tonight! I have to say I tried to do like 3 others, but yours was the only one that worked, and "filled in the blanks" like it was supposed to do. It seems like great fun to make one of these, I just might have to check in to it.
Jenn
I thought you did a great job at this alternate ending. The only thing I might would change is to not remind the reader so much of the original Cinderella story. But I really liked how you didn't feel compelled to explain everything, Like the finality of where she is now. Over all I think you did a great job! :) Jenn
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