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Review by Eeiko Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
First thoughts: Wow, good rhyming. How inspirational, that’s what I need to do.

How did the poem make you feel?

Hopeful, and like the author was really annoyed with people, which I can relate to.

Grammar, punctuation, and spelling:

Perfection!

Other comments/favorite parts:

The rhyming!

:)
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Review of Glad I'm Gone  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
My suggestion is not to use so many periods. Throw some commas in. And not every line has to be capitalized. For example this line could be written,
Why did you have to bring me down
knowing I already had low self-esteem?

Just a suggestion:)
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Review of It's Limerick  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Yay for sarcasm and wit! Only thing though, your should be you're.

And welcome to writing.com!
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Review of Lost  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (3.5)
There are a few typos. Scorching, darkened, and into are what I think it shouold be. The last stanza felt very abrupt and random. I would either add more or just leave it out. But all of that said, I like the feeling of the poem, especially the second stanza. It really captures how delicate your soul is. Thanks for the poem and keep writing:)
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Review of Spring-Soft Rain  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
What a soft-sweet poem:)
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Review by Eeiko Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
Nice. Keep writing like this. I agree with you.
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Rated: E | (3.0)
Good.
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Review by Eeiko Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)
That was a good story:) You had me hooked. Short, but not rushed. Good job!
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Review of Moment  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (3.0)
Good. Just a couple of spelling and grammar mistakes. Poor should be pore.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Ahhhh, school. O how I hate you now.
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Good imagery. I can totally see and feel this happening.
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Review of Depression  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
So true. I hope that you can overcome your depression.
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Review by Eeiko Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
Pretty good little inspirational thing^^
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Review of The Lost Fairy  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Short, interesting, and easy to write from.
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Review of Famous Quotes  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Heh, I got a couple of laughs out of that one.

A wise girl smacks but doesn't run, runs but doesn't smack and crushes before she is died - Marilyn Monroe

To the pencil, "What is a fajita?" His reply was "A cheesy roach imagining in 4 rakes - Aristotle

If you tried to give leaves another name, you might call them Rita - John Lennon
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Review of see me  Open in new Window.
Review by Eeiko Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
Just ask for help and love and you will receive. But I wonder the same things. Why is everyone so happy? Do they have any worries? Of course they do.
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Review of Sailor Moon Quiz  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Good quiz. I got tripped up on a few. Whoo! Sailor Moon! But I don't even know what an electra compelx is. 0.0
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Review by Eeiko Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (3.0)
First off, you have an interesting beginning. While I was reading it though, it got a little confusing at some points. It felt like you would put in an unrelated sentence sometimes. There are also some punctuation errors.

In the second paragraph you wrote, John did serve in the war, but not on the front lines. Then in the next you wrote, John did serve in the war, but not on the front lines. You really don't need to repeat that. And I think, Also in Kidderminster, should be the start of a new paragraph because you've moved on to a different topic, the Wilsons.

But other than those little details, the story is fine:)
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Review of Unconditional  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
So sweet. Nice imagery and mood.
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