This was a very funny, clever, and creative article. Just from the text, I couldn't get a very good picture in my head of what a cockatoo looks like, (I couldn't see the pictures you included) but you did well in capturing the cockatoo's quirky behavior. Excellent job.
I LOVE the imagery you used- especially "robin egg sky". This is a beautiful poem and I think you did a wonderful job expressing the gentle grace and beauty of nature. I can feel that it is a warm spring day even though you didn't write that. There are a few spelling errors (i.e. "sof" instead of "of" and "delecately" rather than "delicately") and I think the poem would be more visually appealing if the last two stanzas were combined (I feel that they could be categorized together because they both describe the girl). You might also try varying prepositions like "as" and "of", since they were used several times. But these are minor, technical issues. Overall it was a beautiful and well-worded piece. Keep up the writing!
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