Hello,
I think you have done a good job here. Fantasy isn't my thing but I will give you my impressions and hope they are helpful.
Descriptions are good and imaginative. I could see almost human fighters engaging in combat. Logic flows from beginning to end and nothing seemed out of place. I assume this story is about the struggle between good and evil. The only flaw I see is the abrupt end to the chapter. But that may be intentional. I'll look forward to other chapters
I realy like this poem. It's a very good example of what I've learned to call descriptive poetry. I think you did a very good job beginning the first verse with four specific things, followed by a verse about each.
Each verse is tight with no wasted words that I can see. Rhythm is right and the words flow. Rhyme is not important to content but here it fits.
I'm not sure what you intended by the last verse and may have left it out of my poem, but,I can see a woman alone on storm watch enjoying the world we have been blessed with.
I'll be looking forward to reading more of your poetry.
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