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Review by Birney
Rated: E | (2.0)
This was a very intersting piece to read. However, its grammatical structure and your spelling needs a lot of work. For example, the third line reads, "Its because" when it really should be "It is because" or "It's because". When it comes to spelling, you have made a few mistakes. One such example is in the beginning where you wrote "belive" instead of "believe". You also need to watch your use of double negatives. You said that people's opinion does not matter. You also stated that people should trust you on this matter. But, if what you said about a person's opinion not mattering is true, then for you to say "Trust me", absolutely contradicts everything you just wrote.
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Review by Birney
Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
I enjoyed reading this poem because it had a flow to it. I didn't have to constantly pause in order to get what was being said. However, I think that maybe you should try to work on your grammar. For eample, the second line in the first stanza says "theres" instead of "there are". IK believe that if you work on this, you are on your way to becoming a better writer. I would like it if you would e-mail me at dwayaniss@writing.com if you have any other works similar to this one that you think I might enjoy reading. I invite you to come and read my poem "Invisible" and leave your feedback.
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