I really enjoyed the first part of your story. I wonder how many times this has happened to real people in real internet relationships. I would have liked to know how they first started talking to each other. Was it through a dating site or some social site. Maybe that is something you are going to reveal later on in future chapters. Also, where do they live in retrospect to each other? Since they never meant I would assume a distance away but, it would be interesting to know where. Like I said, I really did enjoy reading this and would love to read the next chapters of the story if you have worked on any more. I feel that this is a story that others can relate to. The reading was smooth and easy to understand and you brought a bit of personality to the characters that I am sure would come out more as the story progresses. Good work!!
I enjoyed reading your poem. I understand exactly what the meaning is because I suffered from depression in the past and can relate to those feelings. A couple places in the poem the rhythm was off but other then that, I feel it is very well written and gets the feelings across successfully. Keep up the good writing!!
I liked this poem very much but, I am not sure who you are talking about. I think I would have liked to see a reference as to who this person is. Is this a husband, wife, friend or another relative? I feel this would make the poem more personal and maybe give it more meaning. Other then that, again, I really did enjoy reading it and felt a great love and respect for the person you were writing about. Good work!!
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