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Review of Loose Teeth  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (3.0)
Interesting story though the relationship between the father and son should be fleshed out a bit more. I was not able to summon any empathy for the father nor did it seem like the son was very empathic even though at the end he seems to be committing a humane act. Also the back story could use some tweaking. I didn't find it believable that the average peasant woman would be knowledgeable in the art of laying curses, also the killing of the dog seemed just in that it had been killing the mans chickens. Overall neat idea and not terrible for a first draft.
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