I could definitely feel her emotions; the words resonated with me. I also really liked the ending, how she was talking to a mirror and not the guy. I was going to suggest adding something about the setting, where she's at, what physical things are going on around her, but when I got to the end, I scratched that because the peice is very internal, and it works that way. I still feel like it's missing something that could flesh it out some more, like a memory or flashback, but all in all it's short, sweet, and good:)
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