Great piece. I really like the discipline of the syllables of Japanese poetry. It is well done here and paints a series of vivid pictures. Keep writing.
I really liked this poem. The comparing of the enjoyment to that of music was very apt and holding the work together is done very well throughout. Keep writing.
Great interpretation of a supernatural experience. I had my own experience long ago, different but I felt that timid awe of realization. I would never doubt that such things occur and often dismissed out of hand. A well drawn scene. Keep writing/
Wonderful poem. Rebuilding oneself after that kind of break-up is huge. Word choice and flow through the piece is great and tells the tale emotionally as well as moving the reader into what you were expressing. Keep your head up and keep following your muse and keep writing.
Enjoying military stories set in a very specific era. This captures the mechanical workings of the aircraft explaining the maneuvers and the consequences. Great exploration of combat and its results And baron's thoughts and pride. Keep writing.
Great piece. Love is so rare one should embrace it. Great expression of the difficulties and the love intertwining. Take it from a man who found his true love, but unopposed by society, just her family. But I know that love is worth it wherever one finds it. Keep Writing.
Great poem. Your demonstration of a lg happy marriage affect me because I had 47 years with my soulmate. I lost her in 20 to covid before they had a treatment for it. But a litany of moments like yours sustain me now. Hold onto them. Keep writing.
Wonderful piece. The feeling of being overwhelmed by worrying about too many things at the same time really struck an emotional chord for me. I've medical issues and I feel I need to get my affairs in order, have cats who are over ten years old whose health concerns me, and run a household.
A great poem. A tough read with the raw emotion being expressed. But such a topic is elegantly expressed making the reader a party to the pain. This kind of thing is what poetry is all about moving the reader. Being a parent, I was deeply moved. Keep writing.
Well done. Your involvement of the reader of the moment of love and abandonment. The description of the moment is well executed and the loss of it was probably difficult to write but it carries the reader along with you to the abandonment. Keep writing.
A great poem. You're expression of loving the wrong person and the effects of it being made with a 'sneer' is well executed and involves the reader as a poem is supposed to do. Well done. Keep writing.
A great piece. It sounds like your schoolboy at first, but becomes the statement for enduring love. Having had 47 years with my 19 year-old schoolgirl it really moved me. One of the great goals of poetry is to involve the reader the emotion the writer expresses. Well done. Keep writing.
Great piece. Structurally I can find no flaw in it. The theme is well executed. As One of those for whom 'boundless glee' was a long, long time ago I have experienced the toll and am starting to learn some real wisdom at the hands of trip. Keep writing.
Your piece really got to me emotionally because my father was one of those men. Too any people today don't realize what those men saved us from. The world we live in is as free as it is because of them. Accomplishing the poem structurally is faultless.
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