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Review of Feathers  Open in new Window.
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
I must say, I am not normally one for poetry but this is possibly the best poem I have ever read thank you for posting this. I absolutely love how you use feathers as a metafor for your friend.
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Review of Golden Heart  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
this is really good i couldnt quite tap into the meater of the peace it didnt flow very well in my opinion but its really good otherwise.
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Review by Dr. Dnomyar Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
pretty good but i lost interest after a little while. the russian doesnt always talk like a russian although i like him. very creative.
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Review by Dr. Dnomyar Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)
very interesting although i believe you meant the lucky ones not the luck ones also you speak as if from past experience overal very good
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Review of Creature  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
great revision good content although a little morbid for my taste one thing to remember when posting on here if you revise don't say its a revision and don't keep the old version on.
one thing i did see in the revision is what I changed here, "A figure began to take shape as he steps out of his hiding place."
you dont have to change it word for word but the first change would make more sence.

thankyou for posting this and please take the time to read one of my stories.
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Review by Dr. Dnomyar Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (3.0)
I dont quite get the point its not very clear is it a poem or short story? also there are a few gramatical errors. I dont really get the intrusion of music. this looks promissing though I'm interested to see what you do with it in the future.

Thankyou for posting this.
Please return the favor by reading something from my portfolio.
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Review by Dr. Dnomyar Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (3.0)
you lost my attention after a few paragraphs but from what I saw here r a few sugestion. For one thing what is the beurow? it means nothing to me. also when the guy was attacked you put reaction in front of feeling pain which is not a good idea because its out of natural order so i would suggest pain first reaction second. and lastly in a particular sentance in the attack scene you left out the word him.

(Disclaimer: I am not a professional this is simply my opinion on your work.)
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Review by Dr. Dnomyar Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)
well for one thing it has a great story is this from past experience? along with pros there are cons one is it doesn't flow well it needs a better flow basically reword a few things. Also don't explane out right why it has the name that it does make it understood. Other than that I like it your use of storms was great let me know when you have finnished your edit.
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Review of The Title  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
true now if only other people like those rich and famous would read and actually take it to heart.
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Review by Dr. Dnomyar Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)
I was just wandering if you were trying to copy something like sherlock holmes.
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Review by Dr. Dnomyar Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
I sea great potential for this it's well put together not a single problem. Great work.
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Review by Dr. Dnomyar Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (1.0)
there is no question please post a question
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Review by Dr. Dnomyar Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (3.0)
Definately different I do have to say that. But not quite my cup of tea also I'm not quite sure to whom it is aimed at I'm just confused with that.
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Review of MisAdventures  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (2.5)
ok the word is great not get big ruckus. also it dosent exactly draw me in I couldnt get into it but its still kinda funny but I would call the villain mud. :)
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Review of Starship Sentry  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I think it was well constructed and once I realized what you said I found it exceedingly cute. Because of this I can't find a thing wrong with it. Awsome story.
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Review of Holmes Again  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
I would say that it rambles to much but it is still pretty cool. Also it became boring due to its rambling but again its still well written.
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